debka_notion (
debka_notion) wrote2003-10-30 12:25 am
close but no cigar
OK, it got the lines right, but not the indentation.  For your reference, the sets of lines in quotations should be indented as a block, every time they show up.  It's sort of a poem in two voices: a technique I like, but which has confused people in the past before.  Sort of an internal dialogue made external.  I suppose I wrote this poem (almost exactly a week ago) as an expression of a lot of other peoples' lives, and my perceptions of them.  It's more of an emotional impression than anything else.  I'm seeing several friends as if they're feeling like a flower in the middle of the desert.  It can be an awfully familiar feeling.  But well- the more things go up, the more they go down.
