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debka_notion) wrote2003-10-30 12:25 am
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close but no cigar
OK, it got the lines right, but not the indentation. For your reference, the sets of lines in quotations should be indented as a block, every time they show up. It's sort of a poem in two voices: a technique I like, but which has confused people in the past before. Sort of an internal dialogue made external. I suppose I wrote this poem (almost exactly a week ago) as an expression of a lot of other peoples' lives, and my perceptions of them. It's more of an emotional impression than anything else. I'm seeing several friends as if they're feeling like a flower in the middle of the desert. It can be an awfully familiar feeling. But well- the more things go up, the more they go down.